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Soft Whispers

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Published: May 29, 2009

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Literature Text

Whisper to me softly
The words you keep
Let my name dance
Among your dreams

May starlight shine
Down on your smile
Whenever you think
Of the time we share

And if tomorrow stops
Just short of bringing
You back this direction
Please remember it all

I feel kind of so-so about this....it could be better.

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Zaphod-Beeblebrox58

WIP?

I'd change "Among" to "In" and stop there

The real poet Percy Shelley said that poems are "never complete as much as they are abandoned." You take them as far as you can and go back later.